trump in turmoil

One of my assignments for a People Photography workshop at NESOP involved making a picture of a fictional archetype from a list of several characters.  I chose "Trump in turmoil" and used John as my model for Mr.Trump (or similar beleaguered business man).

 

 

Below are the instructor's comments:

 

so yeah---they're not subtle. whether they're successful images or not would largely depend on the outlet of the final published/displayed piece. it certainly works on an illustrative level---your message is clear and unobstructed.  i think in order for the "Trump in turmoil" character to really communicate itself to the viewer, it has to be much less specific, or more importantly---more universal...more "human".  the pics you made feel Hollywood-esque---they look like they were shot on a "set", lit with a professional lighting scheme in mind, and acted out. all work fine and get your point across, but there's little that your viewer can relate to or is familiar with. in order to get your viewer to 'relate' and/or 'feel' for this guy, you have to make the subject (and his plight) more like him (the viewer). you have to make  your subject's  woes more like your viewer's woes. the more things, feelings, etc... that the viewer can relate to in the picture, the more likely he is to sympathize.  in order to do this visually, you gotta get him off the 'set' and get him into the 'real world'...use body language, composition, etc...maybe less specific but universally-familiar space as your location. then try to 'Trump up' your subject (ex. expensive suit rumpled or stained, on sidewalk in front of but not inside big bldg.).  know what i'm sayin'?